Hitchhiker

PHOTO PROMPT -Copyright-Roger Bultot

PHOTO PROMPT -Copyright-Roger Bultot

Hitchhiker

“Ran away?” the driver asked.

I wanted to tell him to fuck off but he was kind enough to give me a ride.

I nodded.

“Have you found salvation?” he asked. The speedometer quivered to ninety-five.

“What the fuck…” I reached for the door but his heavy fist collided with my jaw.

“It’s alright, son.” His eyes were vulturine, burning with zeal as he blabbered something about the Lord and lost sheep. “I’ve come to take you home…”

Then I noticed the rosary made of fine hair and deciduous teeth and a shiny plastic crucifix dangling from the rearview mirror.

NOTE: I decided to expand the story. the longer version can be found in BONES III Anthology.

34 thoughts on “Hitchhiker

  1. Well he’s certainly got a ticket to ride this time. Gruesomely good, and I’m left pondering ‘deciduous teeth’. Not a pleasant image. Well done

    • thanks Pirate. I liked your story as well… can’t post a comment under your story..just wanted to say it made me chuckle, you know, adobo is a Filipino dish.🙂

  2. I guess we know the destination, don’t we? Reminds me of a Twilight Zone episode, The Hitchhiker. It was based on a radio play and adapted for the show later. I directed a version of it in audio production and performance class (aud-prod-perf). I was the announcer and someone else narrated. What I like about this is you made this one your own. Wonderful, KZ!

  3. “His eyes were vulturine”, little descriptive touches like this make your stories stand out. Chilling as always while I wonder whether its safe to take even public transport in your stories.

  4. Dear K.Z. Gosh this is creepy and the driver is INSANE – too late and the kid shouldn’t have run away from home. This should be required reading for all teenagers. Really K.Z. this was classic horror! Nan🙂

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