Friday Fictioneers: 100 words Story Challenge LXIII

Copyright -Randy Mazie

Copyright -Randy Mazie

Rivers of mud trickled down Helga’s cheeks breaking up to form filthy rivulets.

Serpent-like vines embraced the old tower like an obsessed lover.
You’d think one would have the sense to stay away.

Still he came… resplendent on his white horse with his unscathed sword.
“Release the princess!,” he demanded.

What princess?
Helga was the one who needed to be saved.

Droplets of his royal blood clung to her chest like a string of rubies… a souvenir from their dance– their macabre waltz of life and death.

Ogres don’t have hearts, Helga knew that.
Still something inside her kept breaking.

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39 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: 100 words Story Challenge LXIII

  1. kz, I really like this line: “Serpent-like vines embraced the old tower like an obsessed lover.” I, too, got a “Shrek” vibe. I think, though, that you maybe mean “unsheathed” sword, rather than “unscathed?”

    janet

    • thank you 🙂 i meant it like, unused sword. awww:( i knew it,everybody thinks of shrek now when it comes to ogres. i miss the uglier ogres that eat people and stuff.lol love shrek though 🙂

  2. Dear KZ,

    Poor Helga. Sounds like an inner struggle for the ogress. On a grammatical note. I think you mean “resplendent ON his white horse” not IN which means something very strange. 😉
    Aside from that, good job.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. I like the way you made us care for someone who has no heart. Never was a big fan of handsome princes on white horses anyway. Why not have a homely, buck-toothed, half-wit save the princess once in while? Beautifully descriptive writing here, KZ.

  4. Ah surprise for the prince-no princess-only an ugly ogress!But then he got what he deserved-first his unscathed sword-ha!Possibly no courage to use it-only used to “demanding”(& getting his way-spoilt brat)and on top of that no common sense-“Serpent-like vines embraced the old tower like an obsessed lover.
    You’d think one would have the sense to stay away.” So he had his last dance-so apt!

    Fabulous Kz-liked this different take on the usual fairy tale-rich imagery too:-)

  5. Excellent. Great imagery in your story. That waltz reminds me of the Tom Cruise/Tim Curry movie: Legend. Curry plays the horrible horned character ‘Darkness’. He dances with the princess. You could refer (an idea) to the unused sword as ‘virgin’. I’ve danced with men who made me bleed, (feet) so I can relate. 🙂

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