Copyright – Sean Fallon
Pretty face, big dreams, danced like nobody’s business…
“Wait and see, papi.” Alejandro told me he’d be in the headlines someday.
How right he’d been.
Should’ve moved out of that dump when I offered him the chance…
But he wanted to be a star… Whore his way to the top, that was his plan.
I picked up the newspaper from my table, carefully dusting off the blow that sprinkled his face.
Cops found the arms, then the legs… but not that pretty, pretty head.
I opened the freezer to ask him again…
Baby, why’d you gotta be such a whore…?
© 2013 K.Z. Morano
The Eclectic Eccentric 
It seems you and I have a common trait in finding a connection between mannequins and freezers.
Nice and gruesome, you do it so well.
Good job
Dee
thanks 🙂
Some very interesting thinking going on here. Well done…
thank you 🙂
This is twisted and wonderful. I love it. When he said he’d make the headlines I don’t think that’s quite what he’d had in mind.
Ah, so I’m not the only twisted one, I see….
This prompt is certainly bringing out the darker side. 🙂 That ending was brilliantly dark humour. (if that’s not a conradiction in terms.)
that last line was my favorite lol thanks 🙂
I was going to say ‘chilling’ but ‘devilishly good’ is more apt.
thank you 🙂
Ooh. Such a horrible, brilliant image – the beautiful head in the freezer. Wonderful.
thanks for the kind comment 🙂
A very gruesome, but extremely tasty take on the prompt. I love you use of realistic dialogue to bring meaning to her actions.
Such a nice piece of evil, lol 🙂
Ooh, great twist at the end. With the words “pretty, pretty head” you can catch a glimpse of the carefully controlled madness!
Dark and creepy!
Sick. Really sick! Where do you get this stuff?
lol. ive been focusing on horror stories lately that’s why 🙂
So I’d noticed 🙂
You’re very very good at it.
thank you 🙂
That was gruesome but it made me laugh.
thanks 🙂 glad you liked it. makes me laugh too when i imagine him opening the freezer to ask the head why he’s such a whore. lol
😉
Dear KZ,
Okay…I followed the line from right to left, reading MissKZebra’s story first. Is there something with the KZ’s this week? Does this mean that two heads in the freezer are better than one?
On my my my. Nice one.
shalom,
Rochelle
This was an excellent dark gruesome tale, that simply delighted.
thank you 🙂
Oh KZ! Hahahah! I just love your ending. You are the master of the deliciously dark!
haha loved that line too… kinda funny thinking about the guy accusing a frozen severed head of being a whore. lol
Grisly! Just the way I like it.
glad you liked it. (you sick, twisted person) lol 🙂 seriously, thank you.
love that phrase…”whoring his way…” And you’ve such a sweet, innocent, angelic countenance… ha, ha.
lol you know what they say, it’s usually the “innocent-looking” ones. lol thanks
Oh, baby! He’s definitely famous now….
Well done, kz 🙂
Ooh, my favourite story so far! I hope that doesn’t make me too twisted 🙂
haha not at all ^^ thank you
Severed heads always make for a good read—great job!
Damn! You are so good, KZ. I love reading your stories each week! The dialogue and the first person narrative really add to this story. Really fantastic!
thanks for the kind comment 🙂 glad you liked it.
It’s easy to be “kind” when your talent is so clear. 😉
A cold and gruesome image at the end there. You create these slashingly good stories so well. I really liked the connection with headlines in Alejandro’s statement and Papi picking up the newspaper later. Got his wish, I guess.
Hi KZ,
Best not to lose one’s head over career ambitions. But keeping a souvenir of life’s important events. That I understand. You found your inner Hannibal Lecter for this this story! Ron
Gruesome — and the dialogue seems authentic, though very “out of character” for you — way to stretch yourself!
oh, i think i’d have nightmares tonight.
Sounds like that whoring thing didn’t work out like he planned. Excellent writing, KZ.
haha yeah, wrong career choice. lol thanks 🙂
Another great story this week, kz. It builds beautifully.
thank you 🙂
How wonderfully sinister. I didn’t expect that ending, but you built up to it perfectly. Another fabulous entry.
Perfectly done.
thanks 🙂
Nice, KZ… I’ve been thinking of you and hope all is well for you and your family. I’m back in the reading and writing, so I’ll see you around the blogs.
good to have you back, ted, we’re ok. thanks for asking 🙂
The details you sprinkled around this story really make the scene. You do chilling well. 🙂
thank you 🙂
Hahahaha! This made me laugh for some reason. Such a devilish sense of humor you have, KZ.
Remember to see the video Rochelle posted on her blog yesterday … you get to meet some of us!
saw it. glad you guys had fun! thanks for the video, it was nice to be able to see you guys!
p.s. you have a really nice voice. 🙂
What a take. Ingenious.
glad i checked the spam folder. i have no idea why your comments keep ending up there! thank you for the comment 🙂
What an ingenious take. Excellent.
thank you 🙂
Well, part of him made the papers. Well-developed story with a great ending.
yes, bit by bit. lol. thank you 🙂
Freezer — good idea, the pungeant smell is never nice… beside you can go and say hello every once in a while.
Miscellaneous body parts! Ooh, creepy, dark kz. Great take and so well written!
Very well written, nice twist.
kz…….please ….think of your ebook….it costs nothing to publish, I can send you ALL the information on publishing yourself, which companies, everything.. You can have a long story or short stories. Really….
would really appreciate the info. 🙂 thanks. been toying with the idea, even met with an artist for the illustrations for short stories.lol but i really don’t know where to start with the whole publishing thing.
Pease do it kz! Really. It’s not too complicated, there is a choice of companies, and you’ll have t get a tax form from the US embassy to make sure you don’t get tax-deducted to the USA. If you use Word that is good, and have pdf. You would send it to 3 different places. I also suggest signing into Goodreads. Will send you all urls. You should publish. You are an awsome writer.
please do 🙂 thanks so much. i have a goodreads account, you can add me here
https://www.goodreads.com/kzmorano
Once you’re published you should get an author account. just good for sales. will get addresses etc.
sorry…think you did already…not used to such efficiency!
im also gonna make an amazon authors profile 🙂 though i admit im confused about the whole tax thing?
I’ll tell you which forms to ask for, but you must. If you have books down the pipeline then it is best to sort it out, otherwise the United States will take your tax – and never give it back. That will be an extra 30% gone from your profit.
hmm.. would it be wiser to self-publish or to look for a publisher who would publish a story collection?
for a paperback you might look for a publisher. one way of looking is to publish an ebook, and show them how much it is selling, then they take over the rights and pay you. to use a publisher for an ebook is giving money away, unless they promise to publish book also. Using a publisher means a long wait usually, as your manuscript is put into a big pile usually. but ultimately it is what you think is best.
yes.. i think it might be hard to find a publisher for short stories too… most seem to be looking for novels
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