In a place like this, catching death is as easy as walking in the wrong alley.
I heard a woman, her fists pounding from door to door… the sound of desperation reverberating through the walls.
When she reached my home, I almost let her in… but didn’t. Couldn’t.
When she screamed, it was like her soul fled her body through her mouth so that it wouldn’t be there anymore when they defiled her.
I imagined her sprawled across the cold stones while they ravaged her…
Her soul a detached observer, hovering… Like mine did when they took me.
© 2013 K.Z. Morano
I’m a little late this week. my laptop’s busted >< but for the love of FF, I'm here @ my granny's using her computer.lol 😉 so it might take a while for me to reach your story. but I'll catch up, see ya there ^^ xo
An interesting view of horror from an observer who’s been there and fully understands. Once again, a very well written piece from you. I was right there watching with that other poor soul.
thank you 🙂
Definitely your genre – superbly crafted in all ways, including the idiosyncratic end – wonderful suspense.
would change to ”wouldn’t be there anymore when they took her.”.
got it 🙂 changed.thank you.
sorry about trifecta,but i do have a valid reason 🙂 im currently mobile,and busy gathering goods for typhoon victims.but im lookin forward to reading ur erotic piece 🙂
oh kz – sorry – good luck, and all the best.
i wrote one after all. 🙂 not my best but well here it is, https://theeclecticeccentricshopaholic.wordpress.com/2013/11/17/trifextra-week-ninety-four-trifexxxtra/
Poor, sympathetic ghost in her own shell…. how horrid to want to stop it but be unable to make yourself move.
where were the cops when you needed them?
or maybe the cops were the ones that did all the raping and murdering 🙂
I felt her fear or maybe it was my own. Great piece.
Wow, great piece of darkness 🙂
Excellent stuff Kz. Well done.
So chilling – I felt the fear of both – the one pursued and the one who could only stand by helpless. Very well done.
Great horror story–as always 🙂
This was doubly chilling – and evoked for me how this goes on and on relentlessly through time. Another great story, kz.
OMG! Been there, done that. Chilling how one who has experienced it relives it through another, but still cannot possibly help. Many layers here, good story.
Ugh, nasty! The horrible feeling of helplessness. You paint a dark world well, kz.
This was one of your best kz. And that’s really saying something!
Wow, kz! Powerful. I especially liked the way you ended it. Well done.
Dark, haunting and heart-wrenching. You turned that alley into a horror. Ron
You can sure write horror… exquisite
You just love visiting that dark side, don’t you? You bring across the horror and suspense quite handily. Well done, KZ.
Also I’m glad to know YOU’RE all right, too. Everyone doing OK?
i keep watching the news and oh i’m just thankful that the typhoon didn’t hit our city that badly. at the same time, i feel really sad for the others and feel really obliged to help, what i’ve been up to lately. thank you so much for asking 🙂
Horrifying in more ways than one.
A disturbing (and very effective) perspective from a previous victim hearing a current victim. I shivered in the part when she screamed. Did I mention effective? Yikes…
Once again, a beautifully crafted picture of desperation and horror. Interesting turn the story might have taken, had you let her in….
Oh what a sad heart rending story-a ghastly act and a helpless ghost!Superb writing once again KZ!
I’m running late myself, kz, and won’t make it to all the stories this week, but I’ll try. Effective piece.
Yikes. This gave me the chills. Good job.