Copyright -Anelephantcant
Mary always waved at me as she rattled along on her shiny bicycle.
Mary, Mary, everyone loved Mary…
Quite contrary. Always, I’d hope that she’d fall flat on her face.
Would’ve loved to have that face…
Bicycles are shit. But I would’ve loved one.
Not everyone had doting dads to teach them how to ride a bike, you know…
Everyday she’d pass by, hair streaming behind her like a golden kite.
Come to think of it, I’ve never even flown a kite. But I would’ve loved to.
Was it me? Did I run her over?
Nope.
Would’ve loved to, though.
© 2013 K.Z. Morano
The Eclectic Eccentric 
Another one added to the KZ body count 🙂
lol yes, i just missed murder 🙂
Really snappy voice in this – excellent!
thank you 🙂
Oh you’re so good 🙂
thank you ^^ glad you liked it 🙂
Hilariously evil!
thank you 🙂
I love a vicious, murderous narrator. Poor Mary.
thank you 🙂
Schadenfreude at its worst! I like the falsely light tone.
thank you 🙂
How excellently wicked, kz, Love it. I hope to see your haibun challenge entry this week too! 🙂
😦 i’ll try to rejoin when i can. back in school and reaaally busy… thanks for reading my story, Penny 🙂
Congrats on being back in school kz! Wayyyy more important than blogging. Just as you can, my friend! Penny, 🙂
nah just my Japanese language class, trying to master the language.lol but i’m lovin it 🙂
Well how cool is that! 🙂
Bitchiness at its best. Well done. Laughed. Identified.
Or rather, bitchiness at her worst. Still well done.
thank you 🙂
I like how you went back and forth with the inner conversation and who knows? Maybe she did kill Mary and just doesn’t remember it. 🙂 There’s a touch of sadness here as well, someone whose hopes and dreams either were never realized or where the ones that were realized were never enough.
janet
thank you 🙂
Inner monologue was brilliant on this one, darling.
thank you 🙂
There is a movie called “Something About Mary” but I think yours would be called The Obsession with Mary.
I felt like I was sitting on a park bench next to a really interesting character. Well done.
Loved the “Mary quite contrary” tie in—great (brutal) story!
evil. I like it. 🙂
Hahahaha! You are a SADIST with that wicked humor of yours. As Henry Higgins in My Fair Lady would say, “Claws in, you cat!” Good job yet again.
thank you 🙂
Back to the dark side! Well done.
Wow, who knows what evil lurks? Nice depiction of the multiple sides of all of us and the jealousy that bubbles just beneath the surface.
Dear KZ,
You could’ve titled this one “Green-Eyed Monster”. Subtle layers to this one. Nice one…but evil.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Another great Flash from your mind! Loved the fact that it was based on a well known Nursery Rhyme and yet had poignant references to parenting – or lack of. Also you reminded me of Dad who taught me to ride, your character ought to thank her lucky, jealous stars. Dad’s teaching method: Enforce independence – on the 3rd ride down the road HE JUST LET GO! I turned and saw him half way up the road and promptly fell off! 😦
aww 😦 at least you learned then? ^^ my aunt who was a few years older than me taught me and i fell off the bike. (she wasn’t exactly the responsible type) some pretty nasty wound on my leg which i had to hide from my mom ^^ then she eventually found out and i got scolded for it, of course 🙂 she was pretty horrified that it’d leave a scar. well glad it didn’t ^^
Sounds traumatic! Glad you weren’t scarred though.
[insert evil laugh]
🙂
Hi KZ,
Well-written story. I like the stream of consciousness and the way the story leapfrogs from on point to another. leading the reader deeper and deeper in. Well done. Ron
I love the character you’ve crafted, to the point where I almost don’t mind if they were actually the one who had done Mary in!
Clever as usual and charmingly written. I loved her hair flying behind her like a golden kite. And I am glad you didn’t kill her though…
Hm…a murderer with ADD!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/07/18/5078/
I wish I would have wrote this, would have loved to 😉
Wonderfully vicious, kz. Nice take on the photo!
I love the honesty of this. We all experience envy from time to time. It can eat away at us.
Ah poor Mary -She was killed then sounds like great introduction to a bigger story
Pure evil and vicious with it. You at your best 🙂
Dee
reading this story I wonder if ur the one responsible for the happenings in NewCago and whether moondust should turn Sam towards you rather than go out on a wild goose chase 😉
great voice in the story 🙂
Brilliant!
Just love this.
When the thought is as good as the deed!
Mini thriller…
Leaves us wanting more!
haha you’re good 🙂 Had a good laugh :3
thank you 🙂
Ha!