Friday Fictioneers: 100-words Story Challenge XXIII

“Every Friday authors from around the world gather to share their 100 words based on the photo prompt and offer constructive crit and encouragement to each other. This creates a wonderful opportunity for free reading of very fresh fiction! Readers are encouraged to comment as well.”

Copyright - Sandra Crook

Copyright – Sandra Crook

My bike skidded to a halt, spraying grit in several directions. My ears caught a faint swishing sound.

From miles away, I sensed it running towards me… strong, swift yet of monstrous built… a half-human with a head resembling that of a wild boar’s.

Its mouth was agape, baring gnarled, razor-sharp fangs…red tongue flickering like fire, dribbling disgustingly…luminous eyes flashing malevolently…

“Be gone, you murdering pig!” he half-roared, half-squealed as he charged.

I smiled at the irony of his words just before I fired, the silver creating a scarlet emblem on his forehead, blood splattering on the gravel.

© 2013 K.Z. Morano



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42 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: 100-words Story Challenge XXIII

  1. I like the murdering pig line (nicely ironic) and your description of the pig is excellent. In the opening sentence, the way it’s structured says the bike is aware of the sound, which I know it isn’t. Maybe “As my bike skidded to a halt, spraying grit , I was suddenly aware of a faint swishing sound”. If I counted correctly, that has the same number of words. 🙂

    janet

  2. Oh I see you building up a role of a heroine here! She actually takes time to smile before blowing his head away, the gothic fantasy of it all! This style has appeal kz, I really think it does.

  3. You use lots of seriously sharp details in here — and they bring your story to life. I could see the beast’s fangs, eyes, and tongue. And great action, too!

  4. Wonderful story and for some strange reason I enjoyed all the gruesome qualities in the story especially the murdering the pig line 🙂

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