Bad Girl! You’re a bad girl, Sammy!
You’re a bad girl…
It’s your fault that daddy doesn’t love mummy anymore…
It’s your fault that she took her own life…
It’s all your fault…
She whimpered on the hallway as she watched the ladies in white cover mummy’s face with a blanket.
“Do you know where your father is?”, asked the man in white.
Clutching her rag doll, the little girl with big misty brown eyes looked up and shook her head fiercely from side to side.
She didn’t know anything… except that tonight, he’d once again climb in her bed.
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You have the ability to make the sun shine then break the reader in a click of fingers…almost..just almost broke me there! You should carry a warning for emotional distress! What a writer you are, what a writer!
gosh thanks!!! awesome race!! i had a rush ^^ now maybe i’ll edit my pic to make it smaller.. it’s obscene .lol
The pics big – but then your story is big too. Might be effective like that, not sure…
Yes…very difficult race!!
yep i’ve decided to leave it that way. ^^
Yes – I think it is more effective – well done anyway, you really pulled one out of the hat there..
you forced me to pull a damn story out of my ass lol but it’s cool ^^ and i loved yours too..
Oh no – in quality – (time is disputable!) – but in quality yours wins hands down. I am happy to stay real with you, and happy to read such a good one, believe me.
Aww that last line stabbed my heart…
mine too as i was writing it 😦 all fiction… but sadly, real for some..
God!! The end killed me 😦
sorry bout that ^^ all fiction.. all fiction… unfortunately, it might be a reality for some 😦
Yeah may be…with many news these days, we are forced to think so …as reality!
Hope U will read my ‘Impressions’
i will 🙂
Ow. That hurt. You have a little Stephen King in you. 😉
thank you ^^
A very sad and all too believable story, kz.
For someone so sweet and innocent, to write such stories…
She has more than a ‘little’ Stephen King in her, Robert. Nice, KZ.
who you calling innocent? lol ^^ thank you, i appreciate your kind comments 🙂
I forgot the ‘looking’ part…
good thing i didn’t write abt your photo, lol
I shudder to think, after reading your story on Rich’s photo…
haha oh the stories i could’ve told about that photo.. too bad 😦 lol ^^
Very sad story.
And to imagine that you wrote this in a race to beat Yer Pirate!
Very well done.
thanks so much 🙂
That is a heat breaking story. I feel so sorry for the little girl. For me, all kids deserves joy and happiness in their lives. Wishing you and your family all the joy of this holiday season.
Oh, heartbreaking just heartbreaking… And so well written.
thank you 🙂
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